Six
rules for writing straight news leads
By Ken Blake, Ph.D.
Middle Tennessee State University
Every news story begins with a lead (pronounced LEED), so learning to
write a good lead is the first step in learning to write a good story.
Journalists use many different styles of leads, depending on the situation.
But most media writing students begin by learning the simplest and most
common style: the straight news lead. Below are six rules for writing good
straight news leads.
Rule #1: A straight news lead should be a single paragraph consisting
of a single sentence, should contain no more than 30 words, and should
summarize, at minimum, the most newsworthy "what," "where" and "when" of
the story.
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Example: "Fire destroyed a house on Main Street early Monday morning."
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The lead is a single-sentence paragraph. Note, please, that a lead should be
written in ordinary English, not the clipped phrasing reserved for headlines
like "Main Street home destroyed in early morning fire." Headlines,
which appear in large print above the stories they introduce, are written that
way to conserve space.
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It contains 10 words -- far fewer than the 30-word limit. Notice that the
word count includes even little words like "a" and "on."
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It summarizes the main "what" of the story, which is that fire destroyed
a house.
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It also provides the "where" of the story with the phrase "on Main Street."
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Finally, it gives the "when" of the story with the phrase "early Monday
morning."
- Important note: There are some mental gymnastics involved in
correctly conveying the "when" of a newspaper story. Suppose, for
example, that today is Monday, and the fire happened this morning. You might
be tempted to write the lead like this: "Fire destroyed a house on Main
Street early this morning." And doing so would be
just fine if your lead were going to be published that same day. But most
newspapers get printed overnight and distributed the following morning. That
means that a reader who picks up the paper Tuesday morning and reads that the
fire occurred "this morning" will inaccurately assume that
"this morning" means "Tuesday morning." To avoid this
problem, you have to write the lead - and, indeed, the entire story - so that
it will be accurate when read during the reader's time frame: "Fire
destroyed a house on Main Street early Monday
morning."
Rule #2: The lead's first verb should express the main "what" of
the story and should be placed among the lead's first seven words.
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Example: "Fire destroyed a house on Main Street early Monday morning."
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The verb "destroyed" expresses the main "what" of the story.
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"Destroyed" is the lead's second word -- a position that puts "destroyed"
well in front of "Street," the lead's seventh word.
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Again, notice that the word count includes even little words like "a" and
"on."
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There are no other verbs in front of "destroyed," so "destroyed" is the
lead's first verb.
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Following this rule will force you to quickly tell readers what the story
is about.
Rule #3: The lead's first verb -- the same one that expresses the
main "what" of the story -- should be active voice, not passive voice.
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A verb is active voice if the verb's subject did, is doing, or will do
something.
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Example: "Fire destroyed a house on Main Street early Monday morning."
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"Destroyed" is the verb.
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"Fire" is the verb's subject.
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"Fire" did something. It destroyed.
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A verb is passive voice if the verb's subject had, is having, or will have
something done to it.
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Example: "A house was destroyed by fire on Main Street early Monday morning."
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"Was" is the verb.
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"House" is the verb's subject.
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"House" had something done to it. It "was destroyed."
Rule #4: If there's a "who" involved in the story, the lead should
give some indication of who the "who" is.
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First example: "An elderly Murfreesboro man died Monday when an early morning
fire raged through his Main Street home."
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The "who" is "an elderly Murfreesboro man."
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In this case, the "who" probably isn't someone whose name readers would
recognize.
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As a result, the "who" angle of the lead focuses on what things about the
"who" might make the "who" important to the reader. In this case, it's
the fact that the man was older and lived in Murfreesboro. That's called
writing a "blind lead." The man's name will be given later in the story.
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Second example: "Murfreesboro Mayor Joe Smith died Monday when an early
morning fire raged through his Main Street home."
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Smith is the local mayor, and most readers probably will recognize his
name.
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As a result, the lead gives his name.
Rule #5: The lead should summarize the "why" and "how" of the story,
but only if there's room.
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Example: "An elderly Murfreesboro man died early Monday morning when fire
sparked by faulty wiring raged through his Main Street home."
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"... fire ... raged through his Main Street home ..." explains why
the man died.
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"... sparked by faulty wiring ..." explains how the blaze began.
Rule #6: If what's in the lead needs to be attributed, place the
attribution at the end of the lead
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Example: "Faulty wiring most likely sparked the blaze that claimed the
life of an elderly Murfreesboro man last week, the city's arson investigator
concluded Monday."
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Attribution
is simply a reference indicating the source of some bit of information.
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In this case, the attribution is the phrase, "the city's arson investigator
concluded Monday."
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Generally, attribute assertions that represent anything other than objective,
indisputable information.
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Here, there should be no doubt in anyone's mind that the man is dead, that
his house was destroyed, that it all happened early Monday morning, and
that he house was on Main Street.
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But the arson investigator's assertion that faulty wiring caused the blaze
represents the investigator's opinion (based, of course, upon his training
and expertise - but an opinion nonetheless). Therefore, the assertion needs
to be attributed to the investigator so readers can decide how credible
the assertion is.